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Kempsey Primary School

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This week we will be using ‘A Cloudy Lesson’ as our stimulus for a few different tasks.

First of all, watch the video clip:


As we have done in previous weeks, we will be starting the week by answering some questions about the video.  This will help us to think more deeply about the video and to have a secure understanding of what happens, which will help us with our writing later in the week.


Comprehension questions:

  1. What is unusual about the house? (pause the film at 3 seconds)
  2. How do the boy and the man get onto the platform?
  3. Describe what the two characters look like.
  4. What might their relationship be?
  5. Describe what the man gets out of the box. Where does he put it?
  6. What does the man do with the metal pole?
  7. The boy isn’t able to make a big cloud like the man. Why not?
  8. How does the man encourage the boy to try again?
  9. Describe what happens when the boy tries to blow a cloud on his second attempt.
  10. What emotion are both characters feeling when they realise the pole has snapped? (pause at 1 minute)
  11. How does the boy try to fix the pole?
  12. What happens after the boy shapes the ring into a star?
  13. How are the characters feeling now?
  14. Is this a happy or sad ending? How do we know?  




Today we are going to plan a narrative recount in the form of a diary entry. Imagine that you are the boy from the video, we will be writing the events of the video from his perspective.


Your first task is to bullet point notes of what happened on the day in the video. Watch the video again to get the events in your mind – remember we will be writing the events in chronological order.


Consider the questions below to help you with your notes:

  • What time of the day was it when you went to the platform?
  • Was this your first attempt at blowing clouds?
  • Who is the man and why is he training you?
  • How were you feeling before your training?
  • What was it like trying to blow your first cloud?
  • What did the man say to you when you bent the wand?
  • Were you expecting what happened next?
  • How will you remember this day?
  • What do you wonder will happen next? Are you going to blow clouds together again tomorrow?


Once you have completed your notes, read through them to check you haven’t missed anything. Next, use a different coloured pen to add extra information to your notes, this could be more description, ambitious vocabulary from using a thesaurus to improve your word choices, extra information you could use for parenthesis or even fronted adverbials you could use.


For example, if your notes say that you (the boy) blew through the ring and made a small cloud. You could add extra information in the form of a fronted adverbial, ambitious vocabulary and an emotion: Through the ring, I saw the sorrowfully small cloud I had created and sighed.


Extra help:

Online thesaurus:

Fronted adverbial examples:

  • This morning,
  • On top of the platform,
  • Immediately,
  • Suddenly,
  • To begin with,
  • After a short while,
  • Soon after,


We will begin writing our diary entries tomorrow.



Our task for today is to write our diary entry. First of all, read through your notes from yesterday – you may want to colour code these to divide them into paragraphs. To do this, choose bullet points which are about a similar part of the story.


Once you are ready to write, start drafting your diary entry. Remember you are writing from the boy’s perspective so use the first person pronouns (I, me and my).


As you finish writing your draft, use the checklist below to edit and improve you work.

Diary Entry Success Criteria

Self Assessment

Cleary organised work, written in chronological order

Starting at the beginning of the video and finishing at the end.


Capital letters and full stops


Correct spellings including some ambitious vocabulary


Varied punctuation . , ; : ? !


Fronted adverbial phrases

To vary the opening of your sentences and make it interesting to read for the reader.



To add extra information using commas, brackets or dashes


Relative clauses

Adding extra information using: which, that, who…


Rhetorical question

Asking a question which doesn’t need an answer and using a question mark correctly.



Tomorrow we will be writing an instruction text based on how to blow clouds. You will be choosing one (or both!) of your pieces to write up in neat on Friday.


Today you will be writing an instruction text for the fictional act of blowing clouds. You will need to think about the steps you wish to include in the method, you can copy directly from how the boy is taught in the film or be creative and add some of your own ideas.


Below is a word document with a template for you instruction text: this will help you to set out your writing using the appropriate organisational features.


Things to remember:

  • Plan your ideas first, you may wish to write notes or do a mindmap
  • Use a title to tell the reader what the instructions are about
  • Use the introduction section to provide a context and purpose
  • Use a variety of different fronted adverbials of time, when writing the method.


To finish the week, today we will be presenting our work in neat. Choose a piece of work that you have written this week to write up. Think about how you can present your work and ensure you have proof-read your draft before you start writing up! We would love to see your finished work and put it on the website: email your finished work to the Office if you would like to.

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