Watch the film clip Snack Attack, which we will be using as the stimulus for our work in English this week https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=38y_1EWIE9I
- Where is the film set? How do you know?
- What takes the Old Lady’s attention in the vending machine?
- How does she pay for them?
- What happens when she presses the button? How does this make her feel? Use evidence from the video to explain your answer.
- Give two differences between the old lady and the man.
- What is the old lady’s first impression of the man? Why?
- How does the man react towards the lady when she is angry?
- How would you describe the old lady’s emotions/personality?
- How would you describe the man’s personality?
- What do you think the message of the film is? Explain why you think this.
Answers for the questions can be found below.
Yesterday you watched the video of 'Snack Attack’ and answered comprehension questions to help you think deeply about the film. This week, we are going to plan and write narratives from the dual perspectives of the old lady and the young man. To help us do this, we are going to develop ideas today.
To develop your ideas, you will be completing three mind-maps (one for the old lady, one for the young man and one for setting). You
Today, we are going to retell the story from the perspective of the old lady.
Your narrative will probably have three paragraphs:
- Opening scene, inside the ticket office, vending machine
- Outside on the platform, sitting next to the young man. Her initial impressions of him and the cookie stealing!
- The train arrives, the old lady gets on and realises the truth,
- use the details from the mind maps you completed yesterday to set the scene
- You can write in the first (I walked through the station) or third person (the old lady walked through the station) but make sure you stick to it!
- Write the events of the story in chronological order
- Use 'SHOW not tell' to show the reader what the old lady is thinking and feeling
- Edit your work carefully as you go along checking for correct punctuation
- You can also use a dictionary or spell check to check spellings and a thesaurus to help you choose the best word and
When you have finished, read your work to an adult if you can – do they have a clear picture in their head? What can they tell you about the character?
To help you create atmosphere in your writing, challenge yourself to include (follow the link at the bottom to recap on personification - it is a year 5 resource but it great for recapping knowledge if needed). . If you need help to recap this, there is a really useful daily lesson on understanding simile and metaphors
You can also continue to use fronted adverbials, parenthesis and relative clauses. Look back at last week’s English if you need help to recap this.
Today, we are going to retell the story again from the perspective of the man. Before you start, think carefully about how your writing might be different:
- Think carefully about the moment that the old lady sits down
- What do you think he notices about her?
- How does he feel when she opens the packet of biscuits?
- What is he thinking about the old lady at different points of the story? How does he react to her?
It like likely that you will have three paragraphs (although they may be shorter than yesterday):
- Describe the lady approaching the bench and pulling herself up onto it. The old lady takes, opens and eats a cookie – how does this make the man feel?
- The man goes to take one (of his own cookies) and the lady’s hand lands on his. What is her reaction now? The lady takes the packet yet the man deals with it calmly by retrieving them from her lap, smiling when doing so (showing he is playful?). A train starts to arrive at the platform.
- The man breaks the final cookie in half, offering it to the woman. She gets even more angry and crumbles it before getting onto the train. He waves to her and she angrily closes the blind on the window. The man leaves the station – how is he feeling now? Does he even realise the truth about why the lady was so angry?
Again, if you can read your work out loud to someone this can help you to spot any missing punctuation and words and give you useful feedback on your writing. Tomorrow we will assess our work against a check list to edit and improve our writing before writing it in neat.
Below is a checklist of success criteria to try and include in your writing. Read through both pieces of writing and check you are happy with them, making any improvements and including as much of the grammar from the checklist as you can.
Today you will be writing up your work in neat. You can choose to write one or both of the narratives. Once finished, you can illustrate your work if you would like to. We would love to see your published pieces of work – email them to the Office if you would like!