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Kempsey Primary School

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Monday

Questions to think about:

  • Who is this?
  • What do you already know about him?
  • What type of person do you think he is? Why?
  • Why has he been in the media recently?
  • List any other facts you know about him:

Watch the video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=a4YcnIXywuo

 

This week we are going to write a biography of Captain Tom Moore. Think about the information people will want to know about when they read a biography. Earlier this year, you wrote biographies of Greta Thunberg – can you remember the structure of a biography?

 

We will start with taking notes about Captain Tom’s life and adding them to a timeline to allow us to write out biographies in chronological order. Later in the week we will use our notes to draft different paragraphs, with the aim of writing our work in neat on Friday.

 

Timeline of Captain Tom’s life

Firstly, we are going to create a timeline.

To do this, draw a vertical line down your page. You are going to write the earliest events at the top and the most recent events at the bottom of the timeline. On the document below there are 21 bullet points of information from Tom’s life which are all muddled up. Your task for today is to add them to your timeline in chronological order.

Tuesday

Writing our biography will follow a similar to structure to our Butterfly writing last week. Each day we will work on one two paragraphs, working chronologically through Tom’s life. The structure for our biography will include the following subheadings:

Early Life

Military Service

Personal life

Moore’s 100th Birthday Walk

Recognition

(Conclusion)

 

Today you will be provided with notes for the first two paragraphs: Early Life and Military Service.

Firstly, highlight any notes from your timeline which will help you. What would someone reading your biography want to know about? The document below has extra notes, in the order in which I would use them for writing.

 

Next, start writing your paragraphs.

 

If you find spellings tricky, use this word bank to help you with your writing: 

Captain Tom Moore

Colonel

army veteran

fundraising

charity

walking

heroic

record-breaking

million

donations

media

inspiration

birthday

 

 

Wednesday

Well done on your writing yesterday. Today we will be writing the next two paragraphs: ‘Personal Life’ and ‘Moore’s 100th Birthday Walk’. As before, look at the document of notes for guidance to draft your paragraphs.

 

For you grammatical focus, continue to include parenthesis and relative clauses. You could also include fronted adverbial phrases, use this link to recap what they are https://www.bbc.co.uk/bitesize/topics/zwwp8mn/articles/zp937p3 and magpie examples from the list below. Remember you can edit you work from yesterday and add some in to your previous paragraphs too if you want to. 

 

Fronted adverbial phrases:

  • During the war,
  • After the Second World War,
  • After a short while,
  • Eventually,
  • During the coronavirus pandemic,
  • Recently,
  • Whilst serving in the army,
  • Courageously,
  • After leaving the army,
  • On the 6th April 2020,

Thursday

By now, your biography should be starting to come together. Today, first of all, re-read your work from yesterday. Are you happy with how it sounds? Have you checked your spellings, capital letters, full stops and grammatical features? It might help to read your work aloud, either to yourself or a family member.

 

Today, we will write the final two paragraphs of the biography: ‘Recognition’ and a Conclusion. As before, use the notes on the document provided to draft your paragraphs. If there is anything else you have found out about Captain Tom, which you would like to include in your biography, you could create an additional paragraph and add it in too!

 

Tomorrow we will be checking our writing against the success criteria and presenting our work in neat.

Friday

It’s Friday! The plan for today is:

  1. Finish off any paragraphs that you need to
  2. Check through your work using the checklist and edit as needed
  3. Write up in neat (on a computer or by hand)
  4. Illustrate your work if you wish to

 

Non-chronological report checklist:

Check and correct spellings

Use a dictionary to check your spellings: https://dictionary.cambridge.org/

Ambitious vocabulary

Use a thesaurus to choose more ambitious synonyms for your word choices: https://www.thesaurus.com/

Capital letters and full stops

Capital letters at the start of a sentence or when referring to the Captain Thomas Moore, British Army, Prime Minister, Spitfire, Hurricane, Queen…

Full stops at the end of a sentence

Correct use of commas

After fronted adverbials and to break up clauses

Parenthesis using ( ) - - , ,

Adding extra information to a sentence by using brackets, commas or dashes. The sentence should still make sense if you take out the parenthesis

Relative clauses

To provide extra information, using: which, whose, that, when, where… with a commas not brackets or dashes

Title and subheadings

Your title should be specific (such as Captain Thomas Moore) and your paragraphs should have subheading

Neat, legible handwriting

If you are writing by hand

 

Once you have finished, you can illustrate your work if you wish. We would love to see your finished work! Email a copy to the office if you would like.

 

 

 

 

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